(Moochi's well hogged Harvey the bear)A Perfect Tragic Ending
By Kamote
This is my most meaningless meaningful line
Obviously hidden from the bottom of the top
I made you smile by making you cry
We both deserve justifiable injustice
We are now wet and drowning from the dry rain
Alone together, a new classic tale of consented separation
Let us buy something priceless like your worthless life
Is it so wrong to fight for what is right?
Forever lost and found in a straight winding path, covered with solid smoke
Act natural like everything is fine, true lies
closed my eyes, opened myself
your my sweetest downfall, I'm not ok I promise
Now we rise as we fall, emotionlessly sensitive
A perfect happy tragic ending
9 comments:
It's good cuz it flows calmly with every word.
For the structure, may irony. and some elements ng poem.
maybe you should register in DeviantArt!
you can post your poems there!
a glitch.
"It is so wrong to fight for what is right?"
I think, this should be:
"Is it so wrong to fight for what is right?
i love the way you cited the irony. continue wrting more.
-eien
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thans for the intellectual comments the both of you, i fixed the glitch, i only wrote it once tyhen published it, did not re-read
its very nostalgic i like it. great post!
nostalgic indeed, how I wish i didn't had the emotion to write the poem
aww thanks a lot!
like OMG! are you kinda like talking about US? hehe.. mafeeling noh? hehe..
hey, your being invited to devart.
woe... you're a lot better writer now... i am so jealous...
@moochie
I'm going to make you guess who am I talking about as always
and if you read the poem and you finally know who am I talking about, look directly to my eyes and tell me for that time we are one more than ever
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